S4cr3d-Cr4p's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Vending Machine Cartoon]

Nicely done! A well animated, funny idea, clearly expressed. Only thing I felt it could've done with was a little more 'punch' after he gets sucked in, like some kind of reaction from the machine. Perhaps the money counter could have pinged up to '0.50' after he got sucked in, just before 'the end'. But otherwise, really nice job.

[Africa Dudes]

Great art, but the rest...

The idea was that this was funny. I didn't smile through the whole thing. Perhaps this is some deficiency on my part. But I'm not going to rate this highly if it fails to achieve its basic aim (at least for me). I'm not bothered about the 'racism' (if it even is there in the first place). I'm not bothered about immaturity or dick jokes. I just didn't find it funny.

You get two stars for artistic merit and sheer effort. I also liked the brutal achievements. I guess my suggestion for improvement would be to be more self-critical and cut stuff that doesn't really work. Though I may just not be the intended audience.

[Moarphs: In and Out]

Nice!

This turned out really well! Aside from potential compression problems with the audio (which I presume will be fixed fairly soon), everything ran smoothly. Look forward to doing something like this again sometime soon!

[The Heart and the Hand p2]

It was good, but there were some flaws

First, I'd like to say that your use of angles is good (though somewhat excessive, almost to the point of dizzyness), your drawing style is good and your animation is good. There are several areas in this, which are not so good:
1. Music: Really, really painful at times. I would seriously recommend getting someone else to do the music. It just didn't suit the piece.
2. Pacing: Much too slow. The entire plot and message could have been conveyed in 1-2 minutes and your story would have been far more effective for it. You don't need to show every detail of every character's actions, movements or emotions.
3. The characterisation/voice acting: The grunts got really annoying and were far too obvious. You can get a hell of a lot more meaning from non-verbal communication than: "I'm annoyed" "I'm happy". The part where the girl did a series of motions to convey something before they entered the restaurant was so unclear that it was almost comedic. I didn't empathise with any of the characters. Also, if you are going to use proper words, use them throughout. If you want to do the grunting thing, do that throughout. Don't have characters who do both.

Overall, I think that the problem could be that you are overthinking it. Try to simplify your ideas and I'm sure we'll see a massive improvement. I'm looking forward to seeing something that takes all of the advice into account.

Bobert-Rob responds:

Well, I actually like it for its length. I'm really not the kind of guy who likes stupid short animations, so many other people do it that it's maddening. I'm sorry you didn't get into it, but I wouldn't change a minute of it. I did everything according to what I thought would be good, and it turned out well in my opinion. Thanks for sharing your thoughts on the matter, though.

[Don't Sleep, Robby!]

Had a problem with audio - I think I know why

Right, well I think the problem is to do with the adverts on the first page. I tried reloading, and giving it time to load, but that didn't work. Only when I clicked "play" before the advert had loaded did I get audio. I think it was one of those ads that tries to have sound but doesn't for Cilit Bang or something like that. Anyway, funny cartoon and I hope this helps others...

Bobert-Rob responds:

Hmm... you know, you may be on to something. That may explain why some people can watch it fine while others cannot, and why some who couldn't get it working at first got it working later. Cuz I know I've never run into this problem before now. Hm. Thanks for that, man, I'll have to mention that in the description.

[Date for One]

Seriously, it should've ended...

...exactly as you ended it, with a fade to black. Then a half-second shot of him eating her flesh. And that's why you don't go out with someone who pretends that they are making love with an invisible date.

But in all seriousness, it was really good. Well animated, with decent, readable characters. The only slight issue I noticed was a bit of feet sliding on the ground during the walk cycle. But other than that, really great.

[Primal War 18]

Amazing art...

Very good art, my friend. The only substantial thing you need to work on is your animation. I think you should just practice doing various movements with basic sticks. It probably wouldn't take you too long to really get good. And then you could be a truly great animator. The only other thing that could be worked on is the sound effects.