I don't know why people say it has a good story...
Seriously. You need to follow your ideas through. Someone has just come up with something that can move particles. First it would have been used for science, creating new chemical structures and manipulating tools. So you should've had the inventor talking about it's benefits to science etc. Then it would've been taken by the military and police forces, and used against criminals. Transforming matter into different forms is a retarded use of that kind of power as well - you could just pick up the criminal as easily, or rip them to shreds.
You didn't even think the terms through - how can you voluntarily take off the glove if you are dead? If you are dead, you can't give permission, so what is the point in the last terms?
The voice actor spoke their lines too quickly, and without enough passion or even correct vocal intonation. The script was also weak and I've already explained the weakness in the concept.
Finally, the quality of animation was average, but could've been better. Music was good though.
Perhaps some things to work on for the next episode.
It's just a story, pure fictional, so it doesn't have to be correct, it could've been another dimension...
Also, about the science, this is NOT a scientific story, I didn't want it to be some National Geographic show... I'd rather make it a mindless use of weapon story.
Also, about the shredding to piece, yea, that's going to happen, IN FURTHER EPISODES.
The last condition, about being dead.
No, you don't do it voluntary, but you do not resist either... How about just ripping it off someone's arm, when he's dead, the answer is: No, it doesn't work.
Oh, and the next episode is out already, for if you didn't read the comment.
I have seen this joke many times before,
and done much better. But the main reason I am giving you a 1 is because you made me wait for fucking ages because you couldn't be arsed to compress the sound. Seriously, mate, this could be about 100kb if you just compressed it.
No, I think I'll judge it based on your obsession.
With the virgin Mary. I mean what the hell did that have to do with the plot? Are you some sort of fundamentalist Christian? Anyway, it needed sound and music, along with better animation and plot. The graphics were on the low side of average.
Very nice! But it could've done without filters.
Yeah, I do realise what you say about the fact that you want it to look as good as possible, but in my opinion, you could've cut out half of the blur filters and it would still've looked incredible (better even).
Ah well. It was still bloody amazing by the way...
You do realise that fires are still technology even if they are very simple. Also, I gave it a 5 because the graphics were fairly average along with the animation, and at the end of the day, what was your message/aim? That we rely on technology? The message I got was that technology is necessary for a good life and that it is also something which shouldn't run our lives...this seems a tad bit contradictory, and I see no point in you making this...it just seems too shallow...
I really don't get how this came Daily 3rd...
And not 1st! CHRIST! What is up with the Glow collab getting it? I mean this was better in every way! The animators were certainly of a much higher calliber...me suspect mass voting of this down and theirs up. Well, I decided to counter that! I am voting this 5 every day this week and voting the Glow collab 0. I mean seriously, the fact that they all voted this one down should not stop it from greatness.
Hope this helps!
YOU HAVE MY SUPPORT!
It was reasonably good, but...
You really need to work on your movements...the punches and kicks didn't seem to have any speed or impact...remember that if you want something to look powerful, devote a lot of frames to the build up, and like two to the movement to the location, followed by a few frames of the move going further than the location (by a tiny bit). I hope this helps!
yer thanks buddy
YAY! COLLAB SUCCESSFULL!
Nice work, guys. Hope to work with you lot in the future. Also: I am aged 15, so you could add that to the Bios if you wanted.
Bio fixed ;)
Great animation and all, but...
...It did have a bit of an obsession with penises. The message I got from this was "Wanking Makes Everything Better", which I can't argue to be false, but seems a rather strange thing to base an animation on. I suppose it was meant to be strange and surreal, but I personally prefer to have strange and surreal gore rather than strange and surreal masturbation. Ah well. Good overall! Love the style!
The only thing that could have been improved was showing luis destroying all the clocks with an atomic-bomb-esque-fart-into-a-match. God that would've been hilarious!
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